Hello, I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this draft. The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or routing-related drafts as they pass through IETF last call and IESG review, and sometimes on special request. The purpose of the review is to provide assistance to the Routing ADs. For more information about the Routing Directorate, please see http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir Although these comments are primarily for the use of the Routing ADs, it would be helpful if you could consider them before or along with any IETF Last Call comments that you receive, and strive to resolve them through discussion or by updating the draft. Document: draft-ietf-ospf-sbfd-discriminator-04.txt Reviewer: Adrian Farrel Review Date: 27 April 2016 IETF LC End Date: 26 April 2016 Intended Status: Standards Track Summary: I have some minor concerns about this document that I think should be resolved before publication. Comments: This is a simple document that doesn't require much to implement or understand. It was disappointing, however, to find a large number of small issues and nits. I don't believe any of these are blocking to the utility of the document and if it went for publication in its current state it would not be harmful. But in the interest of making our documents useful and accessible, and for the purpose of eliminating all possible interoperability and deployment, I think it would be valuable to clean up the issues I have listed. Major Issues: No major issues found. Minor Issues: I should like to see some small amount of text on the scaling impact on OSPF. 1. How much additional information will implementations have to store per node/link in the network? 2. What is the expected churn in LSAs introduced by this mechanism (especially when the Reflector is turned on and off)? In the second case there is a security implication as well. Can I DoS the routing system by toggling some BFD Reflectors? Needs text! You *do* have... A change in information in the S-BFD Discriminator TLV MUST NOT trigger any SPF computation at a receiving router. ...which is a help. --- Section 1 has This is achieved by using unique network-wide discriminators to identify the Network Targets (e.g., IP addresses). You may be aware of IPv6 :-) Although 2.1 gives some hints on the size of a discriminator, I had to go back to 5880 to check that *all* discriminators are exactly 4 octets. So saying "e.g., IP addresses" is at best confusing. BTW, draft-ietf-bfd-seamless-base and draft-ietf-bfd-seamless-ip don't give any hints on this. Oh, and what is "network-wide"? I suggest... This is achieved by using four-octet discriminators as defined in [RFC5880] to identify the Network Targets. --- In Section 2 you have Upon receipt of the TLV, a router may decide to ignore this TLV or install the S-BFD discriminator in BFD Target Identifier Table. I think "ignore" is ambiguous. You need to be very clear that "ignore" means: - take no local action - retain the TLV in the opaque LSA - continue to advertise the opaque LSA according to its scope In Section 3 you also have A router not supporting the S-BFD Discriminator TLV will just silently ignore the TLV as specified in [RFC7770]. Am I missing something when I read 7770? I don't find anything about handling unknown TLVs. --- Section 2 para 3 s/superset/union/ ("superset" would allow you to include any other discriminators!) --- Section 2.1 To be totally unambiguous... OLD Length - Total length of the discriminator (Value field) in octets, not including the optional padding. The Length is a multiple of 4 octets, and consequently specifies how many Discriminators are included in the TLV. NEW Length - Total length of all discriminator in the Value field in octets, not including the optional padding. The Length is a multiple of 4 octets, and consequently specifies how many Discriminators are included in the TLV. END However (!) are you sure that you can include optional padding? I think that 7770 uses padding to take the V field up to a 4 octet boundary. Since all of your discriminators are exactly a multiple of 4 octets it seems that there will never be any padding and it would be less confusing to write... NEW Length - Total length of all discriminators in the TLV counted in octets. The Length is a multiple of 4 octets, and consequently specifies how many Discriminators are included in the TLV. END --- At the end of section 2.1 you have S-BFD discriminator is associated with the BFD Target Identifier type, that allows demultiplexing to a specific task or service. This is a wonderfully throw-away statement with no context and no further explanation in the document that I could find. Maybe this is just missing a reference to another document, or maybe it needs some clarification. --- Section 2.2 has The flooding scope for S-BFD Discriminator information advertised through OSPF can be limited to one or more OSPF areas, or can be extended across the entire OSPF routing domain. Note that the S-BFD session may be required to pan multiple areas, in which case the flooding scope may comprise these areas. This could be the case for an ABR, for instance, advertising the S-BFD Discriminator information within the backbone area and/or a subset of its attached IGP area(s). As I understand flooding scope the options for Opaque LSAs (see 5250) are: o Link-state type-9 denotes a link-local scope. o Link-state type-10 denotes an area-local scope. o Link-state type-11 denotes that the LSA is flooded throughout the Autonomous System (AS). Your text seems to imply something different. In particular, you seem to be suggesting that I can have a scope that is greater than one area but less than the whole AS (assuming "whole AS" == "entire OSPF routing domain"). This needs re-writing to clarify what you want to achieve and to bring it in line with 5250. Note that the 4th para of Section 2.2 seems to have this right. === Nits Has Trilok's affiliation changed? -- Capitalise the document title --- Expand acronyms in the Abstract if they do not appear with an asterisk in http://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt --- Throughout the text, expand acronyms on first use if they do not appear within http://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt with an asterisk. --- Decide whether "discriminator" or "Discriminator" --- In 2.1 you have Value - S-BFD network target discriminator value or values. But there is no "Value" in the figure. --- 2.2 para 2 s/pan/span/ --- 2.2 In the case of domain- wide flooding, i.e., where the originator is sitting in a remote area, the mechanism described in section 5 of [RFC5250] should be used. s/should/SHOULD/? But if you mean should or SHOULD (not MUST), what are the exception cases? --- Thanks, Adrian