I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-softwire-map-10.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20141009 IETF LC End Date: 20141010 IESG Telechat date: 20141016 Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: First please note I participated to Softwire WG work so it is possible the document is not understantable by someone who has no knowledge about the topic. I'll ask another member of the gen-art team to look at it to check this particular point. Other comments: - there are more than 5 authors. RFC 7322 (the new RFC Style Guide) provides an accurate (i.e., more than previously) indication about this problem. - ToC page 2 and 13 page 20: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 1 page 3: (FYI comment): RFC 1933 automatic tunneling was historically the first way to run IPv6 (end of March 1995 when IPv6 over Ethernet ran only at the July IETF meeting the same year). So in fact the RFC was published in 1996 but the mechanism itself was implemented a year before... - 1 page 4: IMHO there is no need to expand the MAP abbrev at its first use because it is in the title (note this would not apply if it was in the Abstract). - 1 page 4: provider's(SP) -> provider's (SP) - 3 page 5: NAPT should be in the terminology, in particular because the standard abbrev is more NAT-PT - 3 page 5 and many other places: e.g. -> e.g., and i.e. -> i.e., - 4 page 6: encapsulation/ -> encapsulation / - 4 page 7: figure 1 should be in one page (the RFC Editor should take care of this in his final editing). - 5 page 8: a missing closing parenthesis in "MAP BR (see Section 5.4." - 5.1 page 8: minimise -> minimize - 5.2 page 10: /prefix -> / prefix - 6 page 13: figure 8 in one page (cf figure 1) - 11 page 19: glitch in the text version: "Attacks facilitated by restricted port set:" - 12 page 19 and 20, and Authors' Addresses page 32: CN is not a valid Country in a postal address, I suggest China or better P.R. China - A Example 3 page 25: please expand FMR in the example title. - A Example 5 page 26: avoid page break after a title - A Example 5 page 27 (twice): DHCP. -> DHCP - A Example 5 page 27: please expand BMR abbrev (i.e., make the text easier and more pleasant to read). Regards Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr