I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at . Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-dhcp-pd-per-device-07 Reviewer: Peter Yee Review Date: 2024-03-06 IETF LC End Date: 2024-02-12 IESG Telechat date: 2024-04-04 Summary: This informational specification suggests an IPv6 deployment scenario in which clients are allocated unique prefixes instead of using a common prefix for all on-link clients. While I find the arguments for this scheme compelling, I’m not sufficiently knowledgeable enough about enterprise deployments to know if there are hidden dragons. The document is well written and makes its case with multiple arguments. There are some really minor nits that ought to be addressed before moving the document along, but nothing critical. How to resolve the text and PDF misformatting issues is not clear, but these versions should not be relied upon unless they are resolved. Please accept my apologies for the lateness of this review. [Ready with Nits] Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: General Where it occurs, ensure that all uses of “e.g.” are followed by a comma. The document is inconsistent in this regard. Specific Page 3, 1st paragraph, 4th sentence: append a period after “etc”. Page 3, 1st paragraph, last sentence: insert “an” before “arbitrary” Page 4, 3rd bullet point, 3rd sentence: append a comma after “devices”. Page 5, Figure 1: in the figure, choose whether you want to capitalize “router” – it’s done differently in the two blocks for the First-hop [Rr]outer/DHCPv6 relay. Also, in the paginated text version of the document (which is the form in which I review Internet-Drafts), for some reason, the second First-hop Router/DHCPv6 relay’s second Route ends in “ccc” instead of “cccc”. This is not evident in the HTML version of the document, so something’s going amiss in the conversion. Page 6, figure title: Is there any way you can get this to stick with the actual figure in the text version of the document? It’s also off in the PDF version, although the PDF suffers from other problems with the figure that may well be outside of your control. Page 6, second bullet item: insert “a” before “high number”. Page 6, third bullet item: append a comma after “logging”. Page 7, first bullet item: append a comma after “etc”. Page 8, 1st paragraph, 5th sentence: the text says, “clients always use multicast unless the server explicitly allows it using the Server Unicast option”. If the antecedent of “it” is “multicast”, then the phrase seems confusing. Why does it say “unless”? If the antecedent is supposed to be “unicast”, then then that phrase might better be rewritten as “clients always use multicast unless the server explicitly allows unicast using the Server Unicast option”. Page 9, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: change “onlink” to “on link” for self-consistent usage and to match RFC 4861 usage as well. Do this throughout the document as the usage is inconsistent in other places as well. Page 10, 4th bullet item: change “WiFI” to “Wi-Fi”. Page 11, 2nd bullet item, last sentence: append a comma after “Therefore”. Page 12, last paragraph, 2nd sentence: change “Neighbour” to “Neighbor”. Page 12, last paragraph, 3rd sentence: change “clients’s” to “clients’”. Page 13, 1st bullet item, 1st sentence: change the “an” before “unique” to “a”. Page 13, 2nd bullet item, last sentence: append a comma after “Therefore”. Page 13, 1st paragraph after the bullet items, 2nd sentence: change “depened” to “depend”. Page 13, section 12, 1st bullet item, 1st sentence: append an apostrophe after “devices”. Page 14, 6th bullet item, 1st sentence: change “clients” to “clients’”. Page 14, 7th bullet item, 2nd sentence: I’d strike “like” and “it” without losing any meaning. Page 14, section 13, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: append a comma after “threat”. Page 15, section 15, 2nd paragraph, 2nd sentence: change “rate limits” to “rate-limits”. Page 16, section 16, 2nd sentence: append a comma after “temporary address”. Page 16, section 16, 4th sentence: change “host’s” to “host”. Page 16, 1st bullet item, 1st sentence: change “muliple” to “multiple”. Page 16, 1st bullet item, 2nd sentence: append a comma after “result”. Page 16, 2nd bullet item: insert a space between “[RFC4193]” and “and”. Append a comma after “together”. Page 16, 1st paragraph after bullet items, 2nd sentence: delete “the” before “network resources”. Page 16, 2nd paragraph, 2nd sentence: insert “the” before “amount of”. Page 16, 2nd paragraph, 3rd sentence: append a comma after “perform ND proxy”. Page 16, 2nd paragraph, 4th sentence: delete “a” before “single”. Page 16, 2nd paragraph, last sentence: append a comma after “case”. Change “implict” to “implicit”. Page 20, acknowledgements: append a comma after “input”. Change “contribution” to “contributions”.