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Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-icp-guidance-04




Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour




Review Date: 2012-12-19




IETF LC End Date: 2012-12-20




IESG Telechat date: 2013-01-10




 




 




 




Summary:




This draft is almost ready to be published as Informational RFC but I do have some comments.




 




 




Nits/editorial comments:




-[Page 3], last line, "The most importance" --should be--> "The most important"




-[Page 3], line 3, "on a unplanned"--should be--> "on an unplanned"




-[Page 6], paragraph 2 starting "There is an anecdote of..."--suggestion--> This anecdote could be removed as the point is clear enough from the remaining text in Section 3.




-[Page 10], last sentence, "TLS" --first use--> "Transport Layer Security (TLS)"




-[Page 11], diagram, please add Figure number and caption.




-[Page 12], Section 8 Servers. Question: is it relevant to add some text regarding middleboxes and expected behavior?




-[Page 16], last paragraph, "AAAA records are provid."--typo-->"AAAA records are provided."




-[Page 22], Section 18.2.  Informative References, please update draft references to their latest version: I-D.ietf-6renum-enterprise,I-D.ietf-6renum-static-problem,I-D.ietf-v6ops-6204bis, and I-D.matthews-v6ops-design-guidelines.




 




 




 




Best Regards,




Meral




 




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