I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-wireline-incremental-ipv6 Reviewer: Peter McCann Review Date: 2012-08-27 IETF LC End Date: 2012-08-27 IESG Telechat date: 2012-08-30 Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: Section 2: or is in progress in deploying IPv6 SHOULD BE: or is in the process of deploying IPv6 Section 3.4: base protocol to delivery SHOULD BE: base protocol to deliver Section 4.1: improve it's performance SHOULD BE: improve its performance Section 4.2: will likely inherent SHOULD BE: will likely inherit (i.e. DHCPv6, DNSv4, TFTP, TR-069 etc). SHOULD BE: (i.e. DHCPv4, DNSv4, TFTP, TR-069 etc). Section 4.5: significant about of external content SHOULD BE: significant amount of external content Section 4.6: host and home network supports SHOULD BE: host and home network support Section 5: (in percentage relative to IPv4) SHOULD BE: (in percentage relative to IPv6) Section 5.1.2: where downstream subscriber often move SHOULD BE: where downstream subscribers often move Section 5.1.4: Once such example may be SHOULD BE: One such example may be Section 5.4: subscriber all traffic must traverse SHOULD BE: all subscriber traffic must traverse Section 5.4.1: limiting the deploy based SHOULD BE: limiting the deployed base Section 5.5.1: on the subscribers premise device SHOULD BE: on the subscriber premises device Section 5.5.2: removal this undesired legacy behavior SHOULD BE: removal of this undesired legacy behavior